The article really needs a better set of references, I've put a few for consideration below (using google's news search in the archives is a good way to find references).My suggestion would be to use her surname. You refer to the subject of the article by her first name, this comes across as familiar and that suggests a particular point of view.Have a go at that and drop me a note on my talk page if you need some help. You should try to rework that into a narrative paragraph.
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The first paragraph is not a paragraph, just a series of sentences.contribs) 15:09, 1 March 2010 (UTC) A couple of things to consider:.Many thanks -Preceding unsigned comment added by TinaEPO ( talk I would appreciate any feedback on the following article A p 3rson ‽ 14:49, 20 April 2010 (UTC) Claire Buchar
Use the function to make proper references.Ī good start though. Only refer to something with a link once. Magnifico ( talk) 21:54, 14 March 2010 (UTC) Possible Needs some things: This is my first attempt at Wikipedia authoring let me know what you think.ĭr. Page for indie alt-country artist Joey Allcorn, singer/songwriter from Columbus, GA who's collaborators include Hank III, Don Helms, Lloyd Green and Johnny Hiland. A p 3rson ‽ 14:45, 20 April 2010 (UTC) Joey Allcorn 
Also, a little bit more about the person, rather than just about 5 sentences and 2 large tables.
Tjbw ( talk) 21:03, 17 February 2010 (UTC) Possible Still needs some work, sentence structure mainly. A p 3rson ‽ 14:42, 20 April 2010 (UTC) Edwin Hodge Could use some links about some of the more fine words/terms.
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